This drabble is excellent. That is curious. Both your story and mine feature a character with leaden eyelids. Mine is a Police Desk Sergeant. He has not seen a good night’s sleep in years. He should consider a different job. Your story revolves around Henry. He clearly has his own problems,

You certainly know how to pull your readers into a story. The first line, as you know, is important. It captures your reader’s attention.

A classic first line, if you are familiar with Charles Dickens’ A Christmas Carol, is “'Marley was dead: to begin with.” A real attention grabber.